Piece I’d Like to Revise

If I had to choose one piece from the first semester to revise it would be my cause- effect essay. My cause- effect was about moving to Mitchell from my home in Yankton. I did well on the paragraph overall but it just didn’t really meet my standards for a good write. I think that the big problem was the description just wasn’t very vivid. Also, I don’t think that my smiley face tricks were “up to par.” My ideas came from something that is simple to write a cause and effect on, something big; my move. It is something that can easily be explained and has many obvious effects. If I could revise it I would add more vivid adjectives, smiley face tricks, and supports to my effects!